Are these rhymes «bad» - boot, root; girl, whirl ?

Принц Андромеды   21.01.2022 11:42   Заявить о нарушении

Alex, I would say, that the rhymes are o"k, but the grammar and the structure of the whole lirics need some correction...(In my humble opinion)...

Евгений Максимов 4   21.01.2022 17:53   Заявить о нарушении

Eugene, when a poem is written, even in Russian, even in Ukrainian, even in English, then inevitably you need to squeeze it's grammatical structure into the rigid framework of syllabo-tonic - chorea, iambic or something else.

Принц Андромеды   22.01.2022 10:08   Заявить о нарушении

Alex, of course...But i'm sure, that native English speakers would do it a little bit differently...So the lirics wouldn't sound a bit clumsy and annatural...

Евгений Максимов 4   24.01.2022 00:26   Заявить о нарушении

I think that it is easier for a Russian to write a non-clumsy poem in English than for an Englishman, an American to write a non-clumsy poem in Russian.

Принц Андромеды   04.02.2022 13:52   Заявить о нарушении

Clumsy

Awkward, from awk (kindred with off, from the Norwegian), is off-ward, turned the wrong way; it was anciently used of a back-handed or left-handed blow in battle, of squinting eyes, etc. Clumsy, on the other hand (from clumse, also through the Norwegian), signifies benumbed, stiffened with cold; this is the original meaning of clumsy fingers, clumsy limbs. Thus, awkward primarily refers to action, clumsy to condition. A tool, a vehicle, or the human frame may be clumsy in shape or build, awkward in motion. The clumsy man is almost of necessity awkward, but the awkward man may not be naturally clumsy. The finest untrained colt is awkward in harness; a horse that is clumsy in build can never be trained out of awkwardness. An awkward statement has an uncomfortable, and perhaps recoiling force; a statement that contains ill-assorted and incongruous material in ill-chosen language is clumsy. We speak of an awkward predicament, an awkward scrape. An awkward excuse commonly reflects on the one who offers it. We say the admitted facts have an awkward appearance. In none of these cases could clumsy be used. Clumsy is, however, applied to movements that seem as unsuitable as those of benumbed and stiffened limbs. A dancing bear is both clumsy and awkward.

Antonyms:
adroit, clever, dexterous, handy, skilful

Synonyms:
awkward, boorish, bungling, clownish, gawky, maladroit, rough, uncouth, ungainly, unhandy, unskilful

Preposition:
The raw recruit is awkward in action; at the business.

Принц Андромеды   04.02.2022 13:54   Заявить о нарушении